Feedback from Mr. Wroe and class of our Film Opening 2

Above is our second attempt at our film opening. The general thought from everyone in the class and mainly Mr. Wroe was that this is a much better attempt than last time. The first attempt was a bit rushed and there was a lot of room for improvement consequently we put a lot more effort into this one and its a lot better. Everything has changed in it, we have chnaged locations and found a excellent place to do the "chase" which is a bridge. Finding these new locations have given us better spots to do filming and also allowed us to get better shot that adds more tension which is need for out opening. This has help continuity also because it all fits together and every has noticed this works alot better than the previous place. Also we have used a improved camera which has allowed us to get better quality shots and given more focus to the characters. Overall everything has been improved from the title sequences to the bit where Joshua struggles to get away before Seamus gets his hands on him.
Another aspect we have improved is the mise en scene, dispute using cigarettes for Joshua's role when he is walking down the road we have used typical things a teenager would have in his room such things as beer glasses mobile phones deodorant and drinking bottles. This helps the media relate to the character because we have chosen to use this in the mise en scene. In the first sequence there is no evidence that we have tried to use this to show what kind of character Joshua is.
In this edition, unlike the previous we have good tracks in the background and ones the represent the nature of the opening and ones that counteract each other because we needed two different tracks, one for the morning scene one for the night scene.  This helps the opening not to be boring and also gives the audience a better idea of what time of day it is.
We have also re-filmed the bit where there was a stationary shot for a very long time, we have replaced this by doing very interesting and exciting shots such as putting the camera in the fridge and not having much time shown on Joshua walking around the kitchen making his breakfast. This makes the sequences more exciting because the viewer doesn't want to be watching somebody eating their breakfast in a film opening they want some action that can persuade them to watch on.

Things we need to re-film is the bit in the bedroom, first off all when the camera tracks upwards there is no phone there but when it cuts there is a phone there is was a bad mistake but one that is easily put right. This will help in continuity because if somebody picks up on this small mistake it can be very misleading. Also with the bedroom scene Mr Wroe has suggested to us that we help the viewer out by really making the plot recognisable, we are going to this by adding a small section when Joshua says something to the sister of Seamus about Seamus this will really make it clear to them exactly what is going on because I think that some people didn't entirely get what was happening.

Also on the editing front we are going to fade the second track in because one criticism was that it comes in too quickly and sort of takes the audience by suprise and the whole feeling was that if it was to fade in then it would work a lot better. This is easily done but we will go away and have a third and final go because there adjustements can be made very easily and quickly.